It’s only the first draft and comes in at just under 5,000 words. I’m not completely happy with the length or some sections of the beginning, but it’s a good start. The changes I made (as discussed here) worked out very well. The whole concept of this chapter is much improved.
As part of this project, each chapter is meant as a stand-alone work. Therefore, after letting this sit for a few days (while moving on to another chapter), I plan to revise/edit the piece and then submit it as short-fiction to some prominent online sci-fi mags.
It’s all part of the master plan. This chapter happens to work very well by itself – any of the background info or previous actions (that would be part of reading the previous 7 chapters) do not play a huge part of what goes on. In fact, the small missing pieces create an aura of mystery, and that works especially well for short works.
Now, I have the other 9 chapters left to do… ah easy.